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PostPosted: Tue Sep 23, 2008 9:45 pm    Post subject:  Reply with quote

The sort to be shocked and frightened, perhaps put on a paper thin brave front, but seek his brother at very first opportunity, to help cope with the strange new world...?

But yeah, although I already speculated a bunch earlier and have been away from the forums (which seem to have gone very quiet) I'm still hotly anticipating the story.
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PostPosted: Thu Sep 25, 2008 3:00 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Koji_Tsunami wrote:
What you say?


*searches around* Oh. I get it. Mama Weegee.  Ha. Ha.

Anyway, Luigi being realized is an interesting idea.
I think he probably would freak out.

Which would be funny.

THIS STORY MUST BE FINISHED! SOON!
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PostPosted: Sat Oct 11, 2008 1:47 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I can really agree to that. I also hope he does not have to make it a Chrismas present to us. even if it would be a really sweet one.
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PostPosted: Mon Oct 13, 2008 12:09 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

... Right, reassurance. Proof that there's light at the end of the tunnel. Albeit half-done, half-arsed proof.

*trudges off to various forms of work*

EDIT: This post is too down. Kirby! Do something!

<(O.o)^
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PostPosted: Tue Oct 14, 2008 6:11 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

it's 12 and a half pages long, most writers call that a decent Chapter.

I would hug you right now, but It might scar you.

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Ok read it, loved it. Would you like a little Proofreading/ advice from your fans?
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PostPosted: Sat Oct 18, 2008 4:25 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Knight of the fort wrote:
Ok read it, loved it. Would you like a little Proofreading/ advice from your fans?


You go right ahead. In fact, I may amend the recommendation to do so in the forum rules.
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 19, 2008 10:04 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very well then.

Only really problem i caught would be page 11 , First Paragraph.

it would flow a bit better, IMO,  Like this



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Okay, now the essay could go screw itself... For a few minutes, at least.

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PostPosted: Mon Nov 03, 2008 5:27 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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The words ‘Samus Aran’ were entered into the search engine. Samus inhaled and exhaled one time before hitting the Enter button, expecting anything.

*googles it*
2nd image result, a sexy picture of samus coming out of suit.
2nd web page result, "Samus Aran is a Hottie! - thisischris.com"
2nd video result, "Gametrailers.com - Samus Aran Naked! by ..."
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This was especially true of Samus, who over the days had gathered an all-too-vivid picture of what the world was like and what the bounty hunter meant to it.

Rolling Eyes No kidding.

oh and some helpful proofreading.
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For instance, you’ll notice that no matter how hard you try, you may not recall how to transform yourself into your shape and size of a basketball.”
. I'm assuming that should be "how to transform yourself to the shape and size of a basketball". Or maybe "How to transfrom your shape and size into that of a basketball".
And a missed " after the pre-emptively in
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“I’m en route, now.” Samus responded pre-emptively, in fact, I see a point of
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Good though. :3
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 19, 2009 6:57 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

just read the draft (lol, took me long enough) gotta say, pretty good. can't wait to see where the story is going with this whole thing... also, I couldn't help but notice that even your characters are realizing your plot holes. better get out the story-mortar and patch those up (lol, jk). good to see some progress... even if it happened like almost seven months ago...
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PostPosted: Thu Apr 23, 2009 5:19 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

lol, so i was on youtube as i go on so very often... so yeah, i found these and they got me thinking about the new chapter... anyway, i thought they were funny and wanted to share the LOLZ

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KkgKYmp9yFM

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vFldBVWFgWo

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oJqgtfvZdsk

theres WAY more, but at this point your probably already on youtube...


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